She used to be a mess,
A beautiful mess,
Dancing like a princess
In a pretty little dress.
Her elegance,
Her essence
Radiating beauty from her eyes’ lens.
Her giggles, her laughs,
Her tears, her little coughs,
Her moves, her steps,
Her twists, her jumps,
And all her happiness
In her triumphs,
Now lay in a still.
Her body now chill,
In a silence so loud,
That her cries were ever heard, I doubt.
They shred her into pieces,
Which are now impossible to Congregate.
Her smile—her armor
Now lay in a devastated state.
For the lifeless body now she is,
The society would call her a disease,
And so, her death was God’s release.
No, my friends,
Her life wasn’t a fiasco,
For she used to be A BEAUTIFUL MESS
In her world of Disco.
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~~~~~BY YOURS TRULY, Miss Shards Of Being Me.
“She is delightfully chaotic; a beautiful mess. Loving her is a splendid adventure.” ~~~~~~BY Steve Maraboli
My take on today’s DAILY PROMPT Congregate
Please share your thoughts on this one. I would love to know what you think about it. If you like it, do check out 2 other POEMS I wrote on HOPES and BELIEFS on my blog and let me know what you think of it. It’s just that sometimes I feel like writing and a poem helps me express way better than a piece of paragraph.
FEATURE IMAGE: Taken by me (of a very close friend of mine. 🙂 🙂 🙂 )
This poem is filled with action and is wonderfully in line with your twist at the end: disco. Well done.
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Many thanx for your feedback. It means a lot. Have a very good day. 🙂 🙂 You got a great skill for art. 🙂 🙂
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Deep . . . So deep. Especially loved the last stanza! : D
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Many many thanx for your encouraging words. Thanx a lot for taking a read. It means a lot. 🙂
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Couldn’t have agreed more
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Thank you Aysha. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 ❤️️❤️️❤️️
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You’re welcome ❤
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“radiating beauty from her eye lens” beautiful line..
Very well written..
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Many thanx for taking a read. Thanx loads. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Your writings are beautiful, girl!❤️Good luck!
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Thanx love. 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Great piece, I like the way you started this piece with “She used to be a beautiful mess” and how you ended it was great. It really comes together in the end. There is nothing I didn’t love about this piece.
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Many many thanx for taking your time and leaving a feedback. It really means a lot. Thanx once again. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 Have a very good day. 🙂 🙂
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You’re welcome!
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🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 THE PLEASURE WAS MINE. 🙂
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Hey love, I nominated you for the Versatile Blogger Award!:)
https://sarishboo.com/2018/02/26/the-versatile-blogger-award/
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That’s really really kind of you. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Of course!❤️
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🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 Thanx.
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Her beautiful mess is written beautifully without any mess. 😉😊 One word – Awesome. 👏 😇
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That means a lot lot, Richard. And u rhymed it well….ha ha 😃😃😃😃 Thanx loads. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Haha.. your welcome .. 😁😊
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My pleasure. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
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I loved it . A beautiful mess and described it’s beauty but the twist at the end is eye catching . Intense and touching poem 😊👌.
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Thanks Shayra. Being in this blogging has not even been a month and such genuine comments really drives me improve myself and keep writing. With all the love and encouragement I’ve received, I surely got a new-found-love for writing once again(after I stopped keeping a journal 3 years back.) Thanks a lot dear, 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 ❤️️❤️️❤️️❤️️❤️️❤️️❤️️
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💝💝😊welcome .
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Pleasure. 🙂
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A very happy holi dear 😊
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Not really that colourful for a Board student who’s exams are scheduled from Monday! lol!! 😂😂
But yes…a Very Happy Holi, Shayra. 🙂 🙂 Enjoy to ur fullest but play safe. 🙂
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Yupppp, all the best for your exams👍
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Yhanks Shayra. 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Love this!! 😊
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Many many many thanks. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 Thanks a lot…(Elisgraci? I’d call u by that?)
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Call me Graci 😊
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Sure thing. Hi Graci. I’m glad to meet u. 🙂
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An inspiration to a new and sometimes struggling poet. Thank you for this bursts of brilliance that take my breath away. You are a star. Well and truly
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Even in your comments, you weave wonder Ayesha. U really are an inspiration to me. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 And thank you for stopping by. It was my pleasure! 🙂 🙂
❤️️❤️️
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Likewise, love ❤
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This one is great… I love the way you describe her in poem❤❤😍
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Thank you so much Niky. Glad you took your time and read the piece. Means loads. 🙂 🙂 🙂 ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤
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My pleasure❤❤❤…sometimes I love to read poems.. But honestly I’m very bad in poems & sometimes really don’t understand that what we’ve to learn from it😃😃
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Then may be you should grab Rupi Kaur’s Milk And Honey right away, my current read(been in my TBR for quite sometime). Not that I am some kind of poet or something myself this was probably the 5th or 6th poem I’ve written in my 18 years of life. I prefer passages where I can describe myself well. Poems are a challenge for me and I think and I am enjoying it. 🙂 🙂 Poems from my fellow bloggers are an inspiration too. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
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Ohhh I heard that book name..and I think I show it on Amazon may be..I’m not sure but I show somewhere
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It’s more than just relatable. It’s so raw and full of emotions that every girl goes through! I should say, it’s a must read for any woman! 🙂 🙂
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Ohhk I’ll buy it and read it soon..and I post too after read..
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Sure. Do that. I’d love to hear from you. 🙂 🙂
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Her beautiful mess is best on writing i guess..
Great work done!👌😍📝
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This means loads. Thank you loads and loads. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
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😇👍
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Many applauses for this masterpiece i would say!!!!Being that poetic is a gift.You are bestowed with that.So nice of your lines.❤❤
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Thank you so much for your wonderful words and constant support. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 Really means loads. ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤
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And this is an exact description of my ex. Taylor Swift and Adele mashed up, eh?
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Glad you could relate. But I’m not very much of an Adele person. My best girlfriend hates me because I couldn’t convince myself to love Hello and Rolling In The Deep. The only song I actually like is Skyfall. Oh and TS? Totally into her!
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Hahaha! I don’t listen to Adele too, my girlfriend used to. I like TS.😋
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I feel sleepy when I make a try to listen to Adele’s XD! 😛 😛
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I didn’t even listen to one song completely. I used to shut it down.😀
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I really wonder how people manage to sing her songs without falling asleep! XD! 😛 😛
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It’s therapeutic that way. 😉
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Lol lol lol lol!
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😎
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And a great author is born,Manidipa,you never fail to amaze me with your words.
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Thank you so so so so so much didi emon kore bolar jonno! 🙂 🙂
Love you onek onek!
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This is one of those poems that makes you grin from ear to ear. Good one!
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Please keep grinning then. I’m so sure Bio is not letting you do so with ease!
p.s. Thank you. 🙂 🙂
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On the contrary, I quite like bio and as is evident from my cocky tone….. I’m quite at ease right at the moment that the exam is still three days away 😌
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Lucky folks!! And i had a sleepless night for revising computer!😥😥😥😥😥😥
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Yeah well you did have just one day gap!! Although it’s a boom sometimes. I’m lethargic at the moment and bio is so not appealing to me…. 😖
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Lovely. ♥️♥️♥️
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Thank you. ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤
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Great movement in your lines. Makes you want to dance! ❤
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Thanks for commenting Juanita. 😊😊😊😊
P.s. you like to dance?
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Woww! I have no words.. The glorious youth vs the sapped deceased, once what was an armour now is nothing more than a dry leaf.. beautiful!! You are an amazing writer… 💕💕💕😍😍😍😍
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And so are you. Your thoughts come across so well even in comments. Thank you again for such a wonderful comment. 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
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